Friday, April 9, 2010

First Kiss Entry

Here is is my first kiss blogfest entry.

Blogfest link:
First Kiss Blogfest

My characters often kiss in the novels, to say the least, so I had plenty of scenes to choose from but I decided to take a first kiss from the recently finished mutant book. There are plenty of kisses in the book but Noah's first kiss with his to be boyfriend is one of my favorites. It's from the very first chapter, which I haven't rewritten just yet because the rest of the novel is in third person but when I first started the novel it was in first person. I originally was going to do the series in first person but think it's much better off now in third.

So, about the scene: Noah doesn't often go out, and then he meets Sebastion (who goes by just Bastian). This is from their first date, where he's super nervous. Noah controls energy/electricity, but he doesn't always have control of it.

First Kiss - Noah and Bastian

We go to a small restaurant that isn’t crowded because it is a little early for dinner. Conversation is kept to simple topics. I think I avoid major errors but do fumble a bit at most the things I say. Can’t stop the nerves but he doesn’t seem to mind. I manage to make him laugh and it makes my stomach flutter. He has a cute laugh.

“Come on. Let me pay for part of it.” Bastian tries to get the bill from my hand to see the amount due. His hand clutches my wrist, playful.

His body scoots closer, until he’s pressed against my side. Our hips bump together and it sends a jolt down my leg. The laughter stops as I look into his eyes. He moves forward, pressing his lips on mine. At first I keep my eyes open, not sure what to do. But then I close my eyes, trying to enjoy the moment.

I feel wet pressure against my lips as he slides his tongue against them. Without much thought, they part and our tongues meet. This feels so weird and yet I like it.

Soon, he pulls away and a sigh escapes. I watch as he brings a hand up to touch his lips.

“Huh.” He says in almost a whisper.

“What?” I go from happiness to fear. Did I transmit an electric charge? I hadn’t felt any but the kiss distracted me a bit. I can’t help but ask, “Did I do something wrong?”

“Oh, no.” He shook his head and bit his lower lip. “It’s just.. you’re going to think I’m crazy.”

My nerves start to get the better of me. He doesn’t seem like anything bad happened but I don’t know what else could have caused that reaction. I want to kiss him again, but need to know the answer first.

With a slight blush, he tells me, “When we kissed, I felt something; a spark.”

7 comments:

Ashelynn D. Sanford said...

Very cute, and I like that you have Noah spark him. ;-)

Iapetus999 said...

Nice! I like the spark.

She sounds a bit electrical...wonder what else she can do...

Good job!

Dawn Embers said...

Thanks for the comments.

And it's actually a "he". This is the same book as the murder scene, just the first chapter. So, the main character is Noah.

Iapetus999 said...

What the...ohhhh.

Sorry about that...my bad for not reading the blurb carefully.
Is your murder scene up somewhere? I don't see it. :(

Melissa Dean said...

This was fantastic! Thanks for participating with me. I posted mine earlier. Check it out when you have a second!

Loved it!

Dawn Embers said...

The murder scene is at my other blog.

http://dawnembers.blogspot.com

Donna Hole said...

You have a knack for writing sexy, sensous scenes. Don't know why you balk at erotica, I think you'll be great.

I loved the spark he felt also; and Noah's nerves.

........dhole

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